“You don’t want to give your readers information. You want to give them experiences.”
This is from chapter one, “Show and Tell”, from the second edition of Renni Browne and Dave King’s “Self-Editing for Fiction Writers: How to edit yourself into print”.
Now, first things first, one should be an editor while writing, so it’s probably best to finish that first draft before going into editing mode. I’ve barely started the third arc of “Dream Clover”. I want to look over some things I’ve written in the first two arc, and try editing those, and see what I can come up with.