• “You don’t want to give your readers information. You want to give them experiences.”

    This is from chapter one, “Show and Tell”, from the second edition of Renni Browne and Dave King’s “Self-Editing for Fiction Writers: How to edit yourself into print”.

    Now, first things first, one should be an editor while writing, so it’s probably best to finish that first draft before going into editing mode. I’ve barely started the third arc of “Dream Clover”. I want to look over some things I’ve written in the first two arc, and try editing those, and see what I can come up with.

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  • Commentary 14.12.2008 No Comments

    Looking at my posting schedule, I should have posted these using the date/time of when they were written. So, something for the 14th in the morning would have been posted with a URL for the 14th, and a timestamp for the morning, rather than–for example–being listed as posted on the 18th when I finally got around to posting. Oh well!

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  • “You can wait down here,” Samuel told Piñole, Arle, and Ceciliate as they entered his house’s basement. “I still can’t believe I completely forgot to recharge my laptop battery. It’ll be about an hour for it to charge before we can leave. My parents shouldn’t be back until late tonight, but just in case they return way early, you can hide out here.” He pointed out places it sit down, and various things to do to pass the time, including a bookshelf with all kinds of books to read, then he headed back up the stairs. “I’ll prepare something for us to eat before we go.”

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  • Early in the morning, Samuel waited atop the hill at the park. The sun had risen, but a chill still sat in the air. Other teenagers were in their morning class by now, he figured, and it was too early for parents to bring their toddlers and babies to the park. Right now, the entire park, the hill and trees, and everything surrounding, where his to enjoy in solitude. He considered resting against a tree, using his backpack as a pillow, and getting a little more sleep, but he wanted to be awake when his guests arrived.

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  • Commentary 29.11.2008 No Comments

    In the PM chapter Sarah has no problem accepting that Arle is on Earth. There’s actually a bit of unwritten story related to this. Without it, there’s a bit of a plot hole concerning Sarah’s relatively lackluster reaction to seeing Arle.

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  • Sarah opened the door to see Samuel standing there. He told her they needed to meet at the park. “Someone’s waiting to see you.”

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  • “I’m sorry, I can’t give you that information,” the lady behind the counter said.

    “But I’m sure she attends this school,” the dark-haired teenage girl said back.

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  • Commentary 29.11.2008 No Comments

    We only had one vanpool stop this morning, so that left a lot less time for writing.

  • Everyone gathered in the physician’s room. Shamrock untied Alfalfa while Clover untied Piñole.

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  • From the top of the grassy hill, Macrae slowly walked down to the group below. “Clover and Shamrock, how good to see you. Cecilia, I see you have a jewel, too. And of course, our dear Melilot.

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